Wow!! The soundtrack is phenomenal: a nice mix of soothing jazz and bittersweet synth. The upbeat tracks capture that "good day feeling" well, and the melancholic tracks are a great fit for the exploration of purpose. I will certainly look forward to your future composition work!
I liked the story! The main three characters balance each other well, and Kishimoto's gradual drift towards connection and friendship is heartwarming. The prose is good, and the fantastical elements are a fun addition to the game's themes.
My only negative note is that the ending was quite baffling to me; the stakes seemed a bit extreme, and I'm not sure how well it fits with the rest of the story.
Regardless, I really enjoyed this kinetic novel. It's a fantastic showcase of your skills as a composer and writer.
100% agree with your claims here and really appreciate your feedback!
The first half of the game is something I'm very proud of and don't see much need for improvement, though the second half, while not awful, is needlessly rushed and way too fast.
While I personally like the ending, I can understand why some might not, considering the first half of the game is mainly just slice-of-life containing comedic banter between the characters and Kishimoto's introspective inner monologues.
This was my first time writing a proper story and I've improved a lot since and the next visual novel that I'm currently working on is definitely going to be a lot better! Though I definitely want to come back to this story some day and maybe even re-write it, as I think the concept is creative and the characters are likeable. Maybe I could slow the pace down, make the game longer, have the eighth day be a bigger part of the story and introduce more characters as the game goes along!
I'm beyond happy that you not only played my game and enjoyed it, but also took time to leave such valuable feedback!
Absolutely phenomenal! The style, story, characters and message were all amazing. While some might not appreciate it, others definitely will. If you're reading this, I implore you to play this game.
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Thank you for using my sprites! Haven't finished the game yet, but I love how the characters interact. Amazing job with the music too!
Thanks Sutemo! I really enjoy your work and look up to you and are happy you enjoy mine too!
Would really appreciate it if you could leave a rating when you're finished! Always appreciate feedback I can use to improve my work!
Wow!! The soundtrack is phenomenal: a nice mix of soothing jazz and bittersweet synth. The upbeat tracks capture that "good day feeling" well, and the melancholic tracks are a great fit for the exploration of purpose. I will certainly look forward to your future composition work!
I liked the story! The main three characters balance each other well, and Kishimoto's gradual drift towards connection and friendship is heartwarming. The prose is good, and the fantastical elements are a fun addition to the game's themes.
My only negative note is that the ending was quite baffling to me; the stakes seemed a bit extreme, and I'm not sure how well it fits with the rest of the story.
Regardless, I really enjoyed this kinetic novel. It's a fantastic showcase of your skills as a composer and writer.
Great work!
100% agree with your claims here and really appreciate your feedback!
The first half of the game is something I'm very proud of and don't see much need for improvement, though the second half, while not awful, is needlessly rushed and way too fast.
While I personally like the ending, I can understand why some might not, considering the first half of the game is mainly just slice-of-life containing comedic banter between the characters and Kishimoto's introspective inner monologues.
This was my first time writing a proper story and I've improved a lot since and the next visual novel that I'm currently working on is definitely going to be a lot better! Though I definitely want to come back to this story some day and maybe even re-write it, as I think the concept is creative and the characters are likeable. Maybe I could slow the pace down, make the game longer, have the eighth day be a bigger part of the story and introduce more characters as the game goes along!
I'm beyond happy that you not only played my game and enjoyed it, but also took time to leave such valuable feedback!
Thanks!
Absolutely phenomenal! The style, story, characters and message were all amazing. While some might not appreciate it, others definitely will. If you're reading this, I implore you to play this game.
Thanks so much man! It really means a lot to me that someone admires my work this much! Have a fire day!
There wont be be suicide attempt right ? *Sob* I have bad feeling bout the rope
Ha ha! You'll have to play it to find out lol.